Picture courtesy of Roger Bultot
This looks like a bad day in the making for somebody. Dreams going up in smoke, where there’s smoke there’s fire, or smoke gets in your eyes – all good ideas for a possible story. But not me. Nope. Going in a different direction.
Word count: 100
Butt Out
After the smoke cleared, the forensic team went to work to find the cause. A dropped cigarette in the bedroom was the point of origin.
“Lucky for you the firemen got here in time to save the place, huh, Jeff?”
“Yeah. Lucky.” Jeff shook his head and walked away, shoulders slumped in defeat.
“You heard the cause, right?” Luke turned to see another neighbor.
“Yeah – dropped cigarette. I didn’t even know Jeff’s wife smoked.”
“That’s just it. She doesn’t. You’re kind of an idiot, aren’t you, Luke?”
“Dammit. Poor guy. I really know how to make a bad day worse.”
© Erin Leary
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I think there is worse to come for Jeff.. and butting out might be his only option now.
You are so right! Thank you for reading.😃
Oh my.
I’m hoping it was the just the cable guy. 😉
Nope. It was a bad day for Jeff.
Good work Erin.
Thank you for reading!
Dear Erin, You’ve managed to tell us a lot without ever saying the words. Nice work.
All my best,
MG
Well, Jeff could be in trouble in a few different ways, not quite sure which way at this point. I had a bit of trouble following who was saying what, but maybe it’s me. I know I’m not ever going to smoke in bed from now on!
If only I had a few more words, I would have added better dialogue tags. Thanks for reading and sorting it out!
Nice twist 🙂 poor Jeff.
Thank you for reading!
I’m taking it that Jeff’s wife was entertaining someone else? Good take.
Yep- she wasn’t a very nice person. Jeff is better off without her.
Oh..okay. I get it now.
This is good.
I really enjoy the different take that we can all have on the same picture.
Well done
It’s fun, isn’t it? We all come up with a different view of the same thing. 😄
Dear Erin,
You gave us just enough information. Poor Jeff. I don’t see a happy ending here. Well done as always.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Dear Erin,
I love the direction you took and the story that resulted. Insult to injury, ‘eh? Very well put together.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you, Doug. I wanted to make Jeff one of the firefighters, but didn’t quite work that into the 100 words. I appreciate you reading!
Poor Jeff. At least Luke has some insight. Great story.
Poor Jeff, indeed!
Uh oh. I guess this is a case of: Where there’s a naked butt, there’s a fire.
Randy
That’s a good way to look at it! 😜
there’s always twist when least expected
That’s what I was going for – so glad it worked for you!
Yikes. Poor Jeff. Well done!
Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it. 😀
It’s definitely sympathies with Jeff on this one. That dropped cigarette said it all. Well constructed story, Erin.
Thank – I felt badly for him, too.
Well, that’s a warning for all those who choose that way out. You can end up in even worse trouble. Well done, Erin. — Suzanne
With friends like that, who needs enemies? Poor unsuspecting bugger.