Friday Flash Fiction

Jennifer Pendergast

Picture courtesy of Jennifer Pendergast 

My first thought on seeing this picture was of Dr. Doolittle’s famous push-me pull-you animal. Then I had deeper thoughts and came up with this story. Dr. Phil never said the quote I wrote below, but I thought it sounded like something he might have said. Maybe I should have stuck with the humorous bit.

On that note, I give you the Push-me Pull-You. Quite the animal – good for a smile.

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Word count: 100

Decoupling

Dr. Phil said ending a marriage was like separating conjoined twins – intricate surgery that didn’t always go according to plan. But her ache to be free was like a Siamese twin she carried around, heavy and burdensome. Freedom was a feather, an ephemeral flirt that called to her across the way, teasing and enchanting.

– Hon? Where’d you drift off to? You wanna watch CSI?

– Not really. Jack, you ever think about what our lives might be like if we weren’t us?

– Nope. Not for a minute. Why?

– No reason. Just thinking.

– Dangerous thing, thinking.

© Erin Leary

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35 thoughts on “Friday Flash Fiction

  1. Gabriel Oak said to Bathsheba “whenever you look up, there shall I be; and whenever I look up, there shall you be.” All couples have a “fit”. One man’s paradise is another man’s hell.
    Great piece Erin.

  2. This story is notable as much for what it doesn’t say about the man in her life. He only has two lines to say, but they say it all. In spades. Good one Erin.

  3. Dear Erin,

    That was a good story and perfect for the prompt. Push-me-pull you. Haven’t heard that in a while. The conversation was spot on and the ending was exactly what happens most of the time. Well done.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • Just asking the question takes nerve but to hear that answer tells her all she needed to know. Some people just stop growing and that’s when friction sets in. Thank you for reading, Doug.

  4. It’s very sad that Jack doesn’t see anything wrong with the marriage, or how unhappy his wife is. He seems too wrapped up in himself and the TV screen to care. As for the comment he made about thinking …! The woman’s thinking has led to her desperate need for freedom from a marriage that’s crushing her individuality. Great story, Erin, and very thought-provoking.

  5. Lovely take on the prompt Erin. The dialogue was so believable and says everything about the state of their marriage. Could have been overheard in many households I fear…well done.

  6. Erin,
    Very nice glimpse into a marriage. This could be a moment of over thinking or a call to action. We can never really know what anyone is thinking in a marriage and not all thoughts need to be acted on. Push me – pull me indeed.
    Be well,
    Tracey

  7. it’s only dangerous if your thinking leads you away in secret rather than turning your thoughts into positive actions that excite, and maybe titillate, your partner.
    Stop hoping your other will act and start acting.
    Randy

  8. Dear Erin,

    How many marriages go on for years without communication, without one or the other looking up to see what’s happening before it’s too late?
    I loved your analogy of carrying around a Siamese twin and the Dr. Phil “quote.” Well done.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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