Friday Flash Fiction

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Picture courtesy of Georgia Koch   

Stark picture, this boat has seen better days. I am convinced something grim happened here.

Word count: 100

Low Tide

The wind was at his back heading out of the bay. Coming home against the tide, every pull on the oars made his muscles burn and the relentless friction opened up his palms.

Carrying the remains of this latest plague out to sea and dumping them far from shore had to be done. And he seemed to be immune so far.

He’d thought about scuttling the boat several times and going down with the lost. His mother once called him an eternal optimist; he wished she were around to help buoy his spirits today.

Seagulls shrieked and circled overhead. Almost home.

© Erin Leary

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22 thoughts on “Friday Flash Fiction

  1. Good story this week, Erin. I like the idea that they would send the seemingly immune fellow to do this chore. Poor guy. Let’s hope he can build up immunity to that worst of all plagues, despair as well.

    All my best,
    Marie Gail

  2. Dear Erin,

    This is a beautiful story, Erin and I enjoyed it thoroughly from start to finish. One note, which I hope you forgive me for including, but I add it because I think you’ll benefit from considering it and what the change will do to the flow of the sentence in question.

    You write….Coming home against the tide, every pull on the oars made his muscles burn, his palms opening up from relentless friction.

    Consider…Coming home against the tide, every pull on the oars made his muscles burn and the relentless friction opened up his palms.

    Your call, of course. Just yammering.

    Aloha,

    Doug

    • Thank, Doug.

      I felt that sentence had a glitch and was thinking this morning of how to smooth it out. I like your suggestion! Your advice is always appreciated – keep yammering away!

      Erin

  3. Such a sense of weary despair in this piece; what a thankless, depressing task to have to undertake on a regular basis. Well done Erin. (And I agree with Doug’s comment. Present participles are a great way of saving words in a short piece, but the amendment flows beautifully.)

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