Picture courtesy of Dawn
Two women, shopping at the jumble sale, talking about men, as women often do.
Word count: 100
This Little Light of Mine
– You know, he talks a lot of big words but then he puts that light of his right under a barrel. Someone who thinks he’s that clever oughta put his lamp on the bed stand, you know what I mean? Shine it for all to see!
– Makes you wonder what he’s got to hide, that’s for sure. Maybe he’s not as bright as he likes to let on.
– Well, you know what the good book says, dear. Those that have, get and those that don’t, don’t get much more.
– I know, mama. Don’t I know. Oooh – isn’t the pink one pretty?
© Erin Leary
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I like your idea of using this as a jumble sale. I’m surprised that idea hasn’t come up yet.
janet
It looked like that to me on first glance. Thanks for reading!
Very clever writing.
Thank you for reading!
Dear Erin,
This put me in mind of a summer trip to a flea market with a good friend last summer. Our conversation was more fun than the shopping itself.
Natural dialogue between women. Nice.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thanks, Rochelle. I was inspired by higher forces this week – had to do a quick bible verse review, and that prompted the dialogue. 🙂
The dialogue was very natural. I felt like I was actually overhearing a private conversation. Good story. I enjoyed it.
Thank you for reading!
The dialogue was really good – sounds like me and friends at a garage sale, or my sister. Clever!
Thank you – I’m glad it came across as believable.
Very realistic! The reader feels like they’re right there listening in on the conversation!
Thank you!!
Erin, this is going to sound bizarre. Okay, now that you’re prepared, when I first saw this week’s photo, the song “This Little Light of MIne” popped into my head. I went in a totally different direction with my story, but that was my very first thought. I too chose to write dialogue this week. Well done.
That is funny. I actually googled the “hide your light under a bushel” and read the Bible passage. My dialogue is a variation on that passage – yes, I admit, I plagarized the Bible. 🙂
The authors are dead. I don’t think you’ll be hearing from their attorneys. 🙂
Ha! I kept expecting someone to call me on it… 🙂
This is a believable and interesting exchange. I already have them all pictured. I really like what you did here! 😀
Ha yes this sounds very believable.