It took looking at this picture awhile before I could see what was going on. It reminded me of some of the obscure art installations I’ve seen while traveling.
Picture copyright-David Stewart
Word Count: 90
Skipping Stones
– I feel like that sometimes.
– Like what?
– That sculpture thing there – the legs in the pavement, the guy jumping out.
– What are you talking about?
– When I travel – I feel like I jump through the earth and pop up in some new place. I feel disoriented, fragmented, not quite myself.
– You come up with the strangest thoughts. By the way, where are we again?
– I don’t know – check your itinerary. Somewhere in Japan, I think.
– Huh. Right. Day 5. Look at that temple!
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© Erin Leary
I hate organised sight-seeing tours, and you’ve captured the relentless schedule here beautifully. One sight after another and in the end it all merges into one… Well done.
Like what Sandra said organized tours sort of ruin the feel of things and cheapens the place sometimes. I felt exactly that way when I went to Egypt so many years ago. You’ve captured that beautifully. Well done.
Very nice 🙂
I think they need to stay home for a while 🙂
Good dialogue
Dear Erin
I’ll echo. I felt the same way in Israel. Too much guided tour. Well written. I could relate to your MC’s disorientation.
Shalom,
Rochelle
I have felt like that myself. Way back in the day, I saw a movie (don’t remember anything about it other than the sense of hurrying) called “If it’s Tuesday This Must Be Belgium.” This reminds me of that.
janet
WOW!! It seems you took a very closer look at the picture and wrote it really very well..
Will you plz find osme time to read my short sromantic story? plz..
http://yourstoryclub.com/short-stories-love/romance-short-story-tonight-you-are-mine/
Lovely dialogue – and I can relate to them too. They should probably slow down and take some time in each place before moving on 🙂
This is terrific!
your dialogue here is great.
I couldn’t figure out what was going on in the picture until I read some other people’s stories, lol.
I love the dialogue; it’s pretty snappy.
This type of travel old be the worst thing for me. And you have convinced me to never attempt it. 🙂
“By the way, where are we again?” I want to scream at her/ him to pay attention. Great dialogue and mood.
A very imaginative interpretation of the prompt Erin. I liked the image of ‘popping up’ in a new place.
well done. with the alternating dialogue, only two people, names aren’t necessary, so you saved words. good. however, you can use the hyphen for one, not use it for the other, to differentiate. although it wasn’t difficult anyway.