Flash Friday Fiction

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This picture looks just like a beach path at a house I stayed at on the island of Oahu 21 years ago.  It evoked a very powerful memory from a walk I’d taken with my then husband.  Most of my dialogue went on in my head.  I never spoke as plainly as this.  Had I, perhaps he would have felt the same way as this guy.  Genre: Historical Truth  Word Count: (for you, Rich) 100.

Poison

– Oh for god’s sake, stop whining!

– But it burns – my foot is on fire!!

– You knew there were poisonous jellyfish on the beach.  You knew we had our big plans tonight.  It’s like you wanted to wreck everything.  We can’t even take a romantic stroll on the beach without disaster.

– Ouch – no, ouch – really, I just wasn’t looking.

– What the hell.  Might as well just accept we’re going nowhere.

– You’re right – as usual, everything is my fault.  OUCH!

– Man up.  Once this vacation is over, I’m never going anywhere with you again.

– You’re right again.  After this vacation, never.

The photo prompt is courtesy of Renee Heath.  Links to all the other Flash Friday Fictioneers can be found here.

© Erin Leary

18 thoughts on “Flash Friday Fiction

  1. well, hello to you too! love the bickering, but it would be hard to believe (not impossible at all) that he would step on it intentionally. that’s some nasty pain. but i like how she’s the one saying no to future trips. atta girl!

  2. I like the way the title can be taken two ways–literally with the jellyfish sting and figuratively in what’s happening to the relationship. Sorry to see that it was a real poison in your actual relationship. 😦 Your dialogue is unfortunately all too realistic.

    janet

    • PS — I’ve never seen a jellyfish ( so far ) but I thought they couldn’t sting once they washed up on shore. I will file that away as a note to self — don’t prod one with a bare foot.

  3. Hi Erin,
    Good, realistic dialog. I had trouble figuring out who was who, but from your intro, I’m guessing it was the guy who stepped on the jellyfish. Might want to put in one tag at the start to clarify. Ron

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